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Raised on delusional belief
Of deranged cerebral chess games
Forging memories into myth.
Behind the curtain is a puppet master
Reminding me that I'm not an illusion

Ramming their rancid fingers
Into my head.
Deliriously caressing the frantically
Running thoughts trying desperately
To flee the on coming crash

Your wondering fingers slither their way
Through my soul, corroding the crumbling
Walls of a rapidly deteriorating city.
Abandoned  after many years of thought.
Forgotten.
I tried to write... pretty sure it didn't work
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
This is really nice. You have used some beautiful metaphors here to create a very powerful effect that most people would be able to relate to. The second stanza, in particular, reads really well - easy, with a nice rhythm. Great work.
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Katrinadoesntknow Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
thank you very much
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AlecWolfe Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2010
you're very welcome
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RainySkyz Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2010   Writer
It worked. I like it!
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Katrinadoesntknow Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2010
thank you very much :p
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Katrinadoesntknow Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
Hmmm I dont remember but I'm sure there was a reason I said that
Sorry for the confusion :)
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Katrinadoesntknow Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
Hmmm I dont remember but I'm sure there was a reason I said that
Sorry for the confusion :)
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This is excellent! I love the ways you worded this. The power, the energy, the imagery...excellent job! I'm pretty sure that you succeeded. ^.^
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Katrinadoesntknow Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010
Wow :0 that was surprise :) I wasnt expecting such a response. Thank you
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. ^.^
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